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Tragedy and Comedy are odd friends

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Vorwort zu diesem Kapitel:
Nach einem gefühlten Millenium endlich wieder ein Update. ^^

Ich finde es etwas schade, wie arm die Formatierungsmöglichkeiten hier bei Mexx sind. Ich hätte den Text gerne visuell etwas variierender gestaltet, um die Atmosphäre besser rüber zu bringen. ._. Und um den Content noch surrealer zu gestalten (wobei ich denke, dass auch schon jetzt kaum einer mehr durchblickt xD aber egal, ich hätte dennoch gerne mehr formatier! :v).

Wie dem auch sei, ich möchte euch gar nicht länger mit dem Vorwort aufhalten, also verabschiede ich mich an dieser Stelle. Fühlt euch frei, mir eure Gedanken zum Kapitel in den Kommentaren mitzuteilen. Ich fände es interessant zu erfahren, wie das alles auf Dritte wirkt. c: Komplett anzeigen

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Friends

Two beings facing each other, both standing straightened. One begins to raise its might, forcing the other to bow to its feet.
 

Who are you?
 

The one on the ground whispers. Kneeling deeply, wrapping its weak body with their thin arms as if to protect it somehow. Pitifully, cowering down it tries to face its opponent. Yet fear strokes its distorted eyes.
 

Opponent did not lower itself to the terrified one, nor did it change its attitude. Instead, it uplifted its stature; a silhouette slender, yet dominant, the whole body covered in black shadows. After letting the down weighed struggling for just another little eternity, an overdrawn grin creeps along its face. Eyes and teeth starting to ridicule the pathetic body along with the proud being itself. Finally, the overbearing silence is cut by the sharp prideful voice.
 

Don't you know me?
 

No response to notice. The petty knob on the ground just continues to look at his upright opponent. Just facing him was a challenge too hard to stand.
 

You are truly pitiful, my dear.
 

Grinner says with an uncommon sincere smile on his lips. Nevertheless, its eyes keep laughing at the small creature to scorn.
 

My name is Comedy. I am the honourable one of us.
 

Suddenly, still slowly, its fear starts to fade away. Just in little portions but still. The one kneeling on the ground, wrapping its skinny arms around its belly as if to stop that feeling of nausea, glimpses at the creature above him with a little hint of confidence. They are far away from being equals. But still, Comedy, it's a familiar.
 

After introducing its name, their identity, the both beings seem to reduce their gap a little.
 

My name is Tragedy, and I...
 

You are the miserable one.
 

...
 

Aren't you?
 

After a moment of hush, Tragedy begans.
 

I guess I am.
 

Comedy gaining an even more derisive pose, glares at Tragedy. There is nothing but the two of them. Surrounded by the painful noise of burdensome silence, bleak darkness, the opponents continue their talk.
 

It is amusing, indeed, to observe your distress. Hee, hee, but please don't look at me like that, my dear. Don't be too torn. After all the both of us is all that is left.
 

If that is the case, I do not understand why you are putting effort into pushing me further down. If I already greet the ground, why do you keep pressing me?
 

You got a point there, dear.
 

You already possess great strength I will never be able to occupy. Why can't you leave me alone?
 

For the first time, Comedy came up with an apparently straight laugh.
 

Dear, did you not see? We are captured in this abyss, the both of us. Where in the world should I go?
 

Tragedy remained silent. This place was scary. There was no noise, still, it was screaming. There wasn't any sign of life, nor of anything else. Still, the air was pressuring, so much that even Tragedy fell to its knees, not able to get up on its own. Darkness swallowed everything. Just Comedy and Tragedy left to remain.
 

Besides...
 

The only catchable sound existing was the voice either of Tragedy or Comedy.
 

...it would be insufferable dull then. Just let me mock you a little longer. You'll see, soon there will be a meaning. Soon enough, you'll find a way to escape.
 

Tragedy didn't really believe in Comedy's words. Still, there was a certain sheen which promised something hopeful.
 

You do promise?
 

I do promise, dear.
 

For the first time, Comedy averted its gaze of Tragedy. So that the humiliated one could repose for just now.
 

And then you will take me with you. You promise?
 

...I do.
 

1st Shard: One of a kind

Omnipresent solitude.
 

The devouring void splayed its existence around the two beings, empocketing them, beguiling. Odd enough, solitutude was possible even though Tragedy and Comedy were united. Even more amusing the matter of fact that this empty void could feel so downweighting. But while Tragedy struggled and gulped for air, Comedy did not even seem to feel the tiniest danger of stumbling.

It truly was an image of complement. They seemed alike, yet painfully contrasting.
 

Once they realise their own oddness, the construct of desolateness is bound to fall.
 

But as long as those two opponents cease to question their own bizarre existence no light shall fall upon the eternal darkness. And the probability of either Tragedy or Comedy to ever bother to move away from their abyss was close to zero. Tragedy was simply too weak to even dare of forming insurgent thoughts. While Comedy, on the other hand, could not think of a reason to disrupt its superiority. The sole awarness of it being masterful in relation to its one and only ally was intoxicating. Power and control were nasty little assets. At other's cost, the one to posses those traits keeps on clinging to them, abusing, to veil their own frailty. To even hide it from themselves.
 

And this was why the existence of those two Opponents was so inevitable for either of them. Without Comedy, Tragedy would shatter to the ground, not able to bear the burden all by itself, this screaming vacuum held for it. And without Tragedy, Comedy would not have any companion to opress and would be forced, quite quickly, to face its own miserableness. And with that, it would shatter even faster than the weaker one.
 

Even if it did not seem that way - Tragedy, as well as Comedy, needed each other to survive. They both had an assigned role they must fulfil. If one would leave its place, the other one would insatntly die.
 

But what was death anyway?
 

What meaning had life in a hole of nothingness?
 

Did it even exist?
 

What was existence?
 

Questions Tragedy would not dare to ask, meanings Comedy was terrified of.
 

Because they both needed to fulfil their role.
 

They were non-real, yet essential for this world.
 

They were something in nothing.
 

They were alike, yet contrary.
 

They were the same, yet individuals.
 

The were one of a kind.
 


 

And they would not slip through this empty space.
 

Because they were chained to their assigned roles.
 

And it was not possible to break through their own mind to see it.
 

They needed each other to not shatter and losing their existence.
 

They needed to fulfill their role in order to stay alive.
 

This was their consciousness and they were both horrified by what might happen if they failed to do what they were meant to do.
 

Error brings instantaneous destruction -
 

so they thought.
 

At all cost, they needed to stay at this place without a meaning.
 


 

Because if they started to question this place and their own meaning---
 

---if they came as far as to gase at it from above it all
 


 

They would realise that they could escape that way
 


 


 


 


 

Darkness shall dwell among them and they shall never see the light

Until the very last breathstroke before the unavoidable deterioration.



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Von:  AtriaClara
2016-12-11T19:39:20+00:00 11.12.2016 20:39
Sieht doch echt vielversprechend aus. ^^
Zwar ist das Kapitel sehr kurz und ich habe noch ein paar Fehler gefunden, die sich hier und da eingeschlichen haben, aber ich bin sehr beeindruckt. Eine wirklich coole Idee, ich bin gespannt, was du noch daraus machst. Kommt auf jeden Fall in meine Favoriten, ich werde es weiterverfolgen! ;)

Wir sehen uns!
LG AtriaClara
Antwort von:  Nosferatu-kyoudai
11.12.2016 22:38
Hey~
Ich wollte Dir für Deinen lieben Kommi danken! Ich war mir etwas unsicher, ob die Geschichte überhaupt Anklang finden wird, weil sie, jetzt zumindest noch, sehr abstrakt ist. Es freut mich, dass Du hergefunden hast und dass es Dir gefällt!
Das mit den Fehlern kann gut sein. /D Es tut mir leid, falls es irgendwie den Lesefluss gestört hat. Ich arbeite gerade noch daran mein Engurishu~ zu verbessern. :^D Falls es Dir nicht zu viel Mühe macht und Du Lust hast, kannst Du mich gern auf jene Fehler aufmerksam machen.

Also dann, bis hoffentlich bald. :'D
LG
Antwort von:  AtriaClara
11.12.2016 23:04
Da ich gerade Zeit hatte, habe ich mir die genommen und die Fehler, die mir und meinem Rechtschreibprogramm aufgefallen sind, unten aufgelistet. Nicht erschrecken, falls es nach viel aussieht: Die meisten waren nicht schlimm und sehr unauffällig. ^^

straightend -> straightened
Opponent -> "the" opponent? Oder ist das Absicht?
Instead... -> Instead, ...
sillhouette -> silhouette
pridefull -> prideful
pitifull -> pitiful
honorable -> honourable
Suddenly, still slowly... -> Suddenly, but still slowly... (Da bin ich mir nicht ganz sicher...)
belly, ... -> belly...
glimps-> glimpses
gab -> gap
poise -> pose
no thing -> nothing
bleaking -> bleak
... what is left -> ... that is left
posses -> possess
strenght -> strength
For the first time... -> For the first time, ...
appearantly -> apparently
still... -> still, ...
Still... -> Still, ...
by its own -> on its own

So, das wär's dann erst einmal. Bis später dann!

Wir sehen uns!
LG AtriaClara
Antwort von:  Nosferatu-kyoudai
11.12.2016 23:18
Ahh!! Danke, das ist echt lieb von Dir! :D
Ich besser das gleich mal aus.

Gute Nacht! ^-^
Antwort von:  Nosferatu-kyoudai
11.12.2016 23:24
Oh, und das mit "Opponent" war tatsächlich Absicht. :'D Es ist Teil des Stils, den ich für diese FF benutze, ansonsten hätte ich auch einen Artikel benutzt. Also...nicht dass ich gar keine Artikel verwende, aber mit "Opponent" ist ja eines der beiden Wesen gemeint. Ich experimentiere noch ein wenig mit (bestimmten) Artikeln und Personalpronomen in Bezug auf die Beiden.

Nochmal danke, Du bist sehr aufmerksam. :D
Antwort von:  AtriaClara
11.12.2016 23:28
Okay, das dachte ich mir eigentlich auch schon, weil mir aufgefallen ist, dass du bei ein paar anderen Nomen auch keinen Artikel benutzt hast. Ist auf jeden Fall interessant. ^^
Und kein Problem. :D
Antwort von:  Alufolie-kun
29.10.2017 00:12
"honorable" und "honourable" ist beides richtig. Das eine ist amerikanisches, das andere britisches Englisch. ;-)
Antwort von:  AtriaClara
29.10.2017 00:14
Ich weiß. Ich finde die britische Version aber schöner. :D
Antwort von:  Alufolie-kun
29.10.2017 00:17
Achso. ^^
Antwort von:  AtriaClara
29.10.2017 00:25
Trotzdem ein guter und richtiger Hinweis. ^^
Antwort von:  Nosferatu-kyoudai
29.10.2017 06:55
Oha! Habe ich etwa tatsächlich AE benutzt? D: ...Und warum gibt es immer noch nicht Kapitel 1???!!!!!!!11ELF
Antwort von:  AtriaClara
29.10.2017 10:31
Erstens: Ja. Und zweitens: Keine Ahnung, sag du's uns. :D
Antwort von:  Nosferatu-kyoudai
28.02.2018 19:40
I guess because life keeps trying me and I can't get my act together... ._.
Ich habe aber überlegt, ob ich das Updaten vielleicht eher hinkriege, wenn ich kürzere Kapitel schreibe. Also, jetzt nicht kürzer als der Prolog hier. Meine Kapitel fassen mesit um die 3000-4000 Wörter, aber vielleicht wäre es erstmal besser, wenn ich sie doch auf circa 1000 Wörter beschränke. Das fühlt sich dann zwar so unangenehm kurz an, aber hey~ öftere Updates~! ://D
Antwort von:  AtriaClara
02.03.2018 15:11
Macht doch nichts, RL geht vor. Ich kann das gut nachvollziehen, bei mir ist es im Moment auch sehr stressig... und mit kürzeren Kapiteln habe ich absolut kein Problem. ^^


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